two effective hooks

At the moment roughly half of all the fraternities are suspended on campus, ruining greek life itself on campus.


Greek life is about building connections for the future, and the university is destroying the good reputation of fraternities on campus

outline speech 2

Why Fraternities should be off suspension

At the moment roughly half of all the fraternities are suspended on campus. This is limiting the fraternities from being able to perform simple tasks to withhold and improve the fraternities itself. The Fraternities are unable to perform out of state formals, were unable to participate in homecoming, also on suspension they are not supposed to meet and have chapter or elections, along with pledge education for pledges attempting to become new members. This is a problem because it is ruining Greek life at the University of Iowa and setting up these chapters for failure in the future.

I am currently pledging to be a member in the Phi Kappa Psi fraternity and the suspension has been hard for us causing many problems. It's affecting the life of the Fraternity and everyone is scared to do normal things that we would normally do. It's a hard time and it has caused us to miss rituals and most important bonding time within the fraternity  

• Not having chapter
• Not aware of upcoming events
• Not aware of this that happened in the past
• Hurts chances to have an involved fraternity
• Not aware of charity
• No pledge education
• Pledges are not aware of rituals
• Are not learning how to be active members
• Not learning about the history
• Not learning phrases, songs, and chants
• Causes panic
• Lack of leadership
• elections, unable to vote executive positions
• Fear of being kicked off campus
• Inability to meet as many active members

Solution

There are many problems within greek life and suspensions for most fraternities including mine will be off suspension next semester however, the university rules will still be an issue

• Succession
• Talked about very much
• All 24 fraternities already approved it
• It has been done
• West virginia…… find source
• Very possible
• Last resort
• Need approval of nationals and others
• Nationals support us
• Break away from university and no longer student org
• Not bad
• Don’t do much anyways
• 1 recruitment event does nothing
• Still funded by nationals
  
  Counter arguments- staying in university will help with some funds
  rush
  
  

To conclude the fraternities should break away because they will not lose any funds and all that will come from it is the university being unable to limit the fraternities from doing things that they do and are supposed to do on a regular basis

Analysis of sample proposals

Textbooks---- rank 1
       strength
states the problem on how textbooks are overpriced
has several supporting details
        Weakness
States more than one solution
Doesn't give a clear solution

Off campus purchases------rank 2
       Strength
clear intro, solution, and justification
supports the introduction with facts and specific numbers
       weakness
why would the companies want to do this? doesn't give them an incentive and any reason why this would happen
doesn't say why the university would allow this because wouldn't they lose money from it?

Nuclear Power------rank 3
     Strength
Gives a specific reason that impacts everyone on why we need to use nuclear power
Did his or her research on the topic and you can tell that they understand what they are talking about throughout the proposal
     Weakness
Doesn't say how we could fully switch, ie THE COST
Also suggests several options which is not the goal of this assignment
doesn't have a good idea to actually perform this

Speech Topic

For my topic Im going to give my speech over Greek life in Iowa city. My main focus for the speech would be why the university fraternities are suspended, including the one I'm in, and why the University policies need to change. The University of Iowa is being strict and attempting to ruin greek life in Iowa City. I choice this topic because I am joining greek life this year and the constant issue we are dealing with his being on suspension or not. The suspension issue is ruining greek life because it limits the fraternity events and stops us from performing certain activities, ie. formals, homecoming, etc..

Below is a list of references that talk about the suspensions at the University.

https://www.thegazette.com/subject/news/education/university-of-iowa-suspends-nine-frats-accused-of-alcohol-policy-violations-20181010

https://kwwl.com/news/2018/10/10/ui-investigating-alcohol-violations-after-9-fraternities-are-temporary-suspended/

https://www.educationdive.com/news/u-of-iowa-suspends-fraternities-following-misconduct-reports/539649/

major speech 2

This speech asks us to find a topic that we are dedicated to and express the problem that come along with the topic. The goal is to show your power of speech to the audience and persuade them to believe what you believe. To make this speech the best you should choice something that you care about and can connect with the best. If you choice something that you can connect with strongly it will help make persuading the audience to side with you that much more easier. From what I gathered the topic can be over any problem as long as you have a personal connection to the field.
questions
Is this a persuasive speech?
How is this speech different than the first speech?

Comments

After seeing my comments on the paper I can conclude that I need to first clear up my finding and grammatical issues. Along with this I need to improve my introduction by added some sections and backing them up with prior studies that had been completed. Then on my discussion portion of the paper I need to include implications to the paper not the limitations.

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Intro and Methods

Anthony Coppola

Introduction

Wondering when to initially invest in the stock market is a troubling question to millions of Americans. The problem with this is there is no one specific answer to this question. Many studies have been done and it is a fact that the earlier you start investing the benefits will be greater. If you invest early it makes retiring early more likely (cnbc). However, when interviewing the president of Capital one Investing he suggests that his clients have roughly six months of savings in the bank before they start investing (Money CNN). This is due to if the market crashes they want their clients to still have money in the bank.

Methods

Participants

For this study the research conducted was from students at the University of Iowa. This study was taken randomly on the campus, involving both males and females. The survey consists of an equal amount of freshman, sophomore, junior, and seniors. The goal of this is to see who invested and when to find the best age to invest in Wall Street.

Procedure

The participants for this experiment took a short online survey that was created on google forums. These questions were simple and included yes or no answers and a few short open ended responses. Overall the survey took under four minutes to complete. The questions were written to figure out when the best age to invest would be and for those invested if they benefited by learning how to handle money.

https://money.cnn.com/2016/05/13/investing/how-to-start-investing/index.html

https://www.cnbc.com/2018/07/17/heres-an-aged-based-look-at-when-you-should-buy-stocks.html

October 22

The NYSE is a risky business decision, but can hep you make lots of money. The stock market is a way to invest in large companies and potentially own part of the company. This allows you to make money when they make money or vise versa. Knowing the correct age to start investing in the market can help set yourself up for a successful future.  


1. What year in school are you? and Do you own any stocks?
2. What age did you first buy stocks?
3. why did yo first get into investments?
4.How has this benefited you in college? Has it hurt?
5. What is the best lesson this has taught you?

topic proposal. In your topic proposal,

Business
I propose a study that is over the difference between how many people buy stocks at each grade. ask freshman sophomores, juniors, seniors if they invest in the stock market and compare the data to see the trends of who invests and who does invest.
2 questions
       What type of people in each grade are investing?
       How is invest benefitting them or hurting them?
To do this I will go to my fraternity house and interview and survey a bunch of the freshman and  upperclassman. Ill ask them my questions and write down what they do anonymously. From there I will place the information into a spreadsheet and create graphs to analyze the data. The goal is to look into and see if investing in the stock market early on is a good thing and see what people learn from investing early.

Write a few paragraphs on how the genre of IMRaD report is different from an argument-based research paper you’ve been writing in English classes. Post it to your blog.

IMRAD stands for introduction, methods, results and Discussion.The IMRAD report tells one how two write and academic paper and our first draft was not an academic piece. In our First major assignment we wrote about a given field and described how to write in the topic. The paper used academic sources with in the paper however, we also had non-academic pieces. 
The IMRAD describes tactics to write the academic piece. It gives you the structure of how to write the academic paper. The paper consists of a title, abstract or executive summery, introduction, methods, results, discussion or recommendation, and lastly references. This is very different from the previous paper in how the last draft only included; a title, introduction, body with arguments, a conclusion, and references. The main difference other than not having similar parts between the two is that our last paper was flexible. We were able to add some of our own ideas and not just the facts behind it, we analyzed the topic. This next piece will not have ones on opinion it will be strictly the facts. 

outline

Introduction

“If people say your dreams are crazy, if they laugh at what you think can do,.... (pause)  good!” The Nike commercial “believe in something” is a commercial to inspire. It focuses on the determination and the dedication the world should have. It talks about how you can be whatever you want all you have to do is believe.

Purpose

• To persuade the audience to follow their dreams
• Actor and narrator Colin Kaepernick
• He says “believe in something, even if it costs you everything,”
• Colin explains how you need to fight for what you believe in, when he was in the league he challenge the United States. He believed strongly against police brutality, so to protest before one of his games he went to a knee during the national anthem. This sparked lots of controversy throughout the media and eventually caused him to be fired because he wouldn't stop kneeling for what he believed in.
• This makes him a great fit for the advertisement
• Takes place everywhere
• Africa
• Tells refugees to be on the national soccer team
• USA
• Tells kids not to wear obj jersey but him to wear yours
• Europe
• Tells kids to chase their dreams and be the fastest
• Speaks to everyone
• He tells everyone not to act like anyone else because they are special
• Adults
• Tells them to be the best
• Children
• Gives them motivation and pushes them to be great
• The Disabled
• Not to let anything get in their way
• Ends with nike’s trademark
• Just do it
• Music
• Fast pace violin to build up suspense

Ethos - Tries to build sympathy for the company and promote its mission

Pathos- The ad attacks the the pathos aspect by motivating and going into your emotions. Colin challenges you to go deep in your own soul and be the best version of yourself. He emphasizes how to be great you just have to believe in yourself.Colin uses wise words and really brings forth the prompt to follow your dreams.

Logos - Colin uses wise words and really brings forth the prompt to follow your dreams. Colin is a persuasive person and his voice is soothing so when he speaks about greatness the words are stressed.

Effectiveness

• Effective however, spark argument within the brand
• Stock prices went up
• Sales report
• Online sales jumped 25%

Conclusion

Colin Kaepernick tells us to believe in something, even if it means sacrificing everything, just like he did. He gave up his NFL career and since has donated over one million dollars to help kids stand up and push for their dreams. Colin had his time where no one looked up to him, but at the end of darkness their is the light. Colin has reached the light and people are starting to look up to him again. Not as a football star but as a good role model. The final thought Colin leaves us with is” don’t ask if your dreams are crazy, but if they are crazy enough.”

Commercial

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7CwY5atbYnE

The Nike commercial was narrated by ex-football player Colin Kaepernick of the 49ers. The commercial talks about how it is okay to dream and to try and push towards your goal Colin shares about how kids need to believe in something because you need to always strive to be your best. This advertisement  The commercial brings to life the three ideologies of ethos, pathos, and logos. The ethos in the commercial are shown by how he is dedicated and influences kids to shoot for their dreams. Colin explains how you need to fight for what you believe in, when he was in the league he challenge the United States. He believed strongly against police brutality, so to protest before one of his games he went to a knee during the national anthem. This sparked lots of controversy throughout the media and eventually caused him to be fired because he wouldn't stop kneeling for what he believed in. The ad attacks the the pathos aspect by motivating and going into your emotions. Colin challenges you to go deep in your own soul and be the best version of yourself. He emphasizes how to be great you just have to believe in yourself. Lastly the logos area, Colin uses wise words and really brings forth the prompt to follow your dreams. Colin is a persuasive person and his voice is soothing so when he speaks about greatness the words are stressed. At the end of the day the commerical is important and touches the hearts of people all around the nation.

major writing #1

Writing in Law

Anthony Coppola

University of Iowa

Writing in Law

“Every morning when I get out of bed, I have anywhere from ten to fifteen emails from clients,” said Chris (Lawyer from Iowa, September 2) When one hears someone is a lawyer, they often think about how they are in a courtroom or in front of a jury, but in fact that is rarely the issue. Out of 1000 criminal cases roughly on average three cases make it to trial (Rennison). Most of their work is done in the files typing; briefs, petitions, pleadings, and court documents. Lawyers are considered the “professionals of writing” in how they are required to word every phrase to a science (Schiess). Lawyers live at the desk, and most of that time is spent on the computer doing some form of academic or non-academic writing.

Academic Writing

Depending on the type of lawyer someone is decides whether they spend significant time writing academically or not. Most of the lawyers that write academically are working for the state as; judges, environmental lawyers, or tax lawyers (LAWYERS). These writings are then published to city records so that anyone can use them as research. Research is a detriment part of being a lawyer and often it's hard to find sources that are about what your case is over. Chris however, had insight on this and explained to me about commonly used databases such as; lexisnexis, and westlaw (a Lawyer, September 2). These are paid databases that his firm purchased that gives him access to thousands of academic pieces. These pieces from the databases help him draft his own documents and better his argument when attempting to setting his clients cases. Any misuse or error in research can cause several problems just like when writing in class. For instance if one lawyer drafts up a pleading and makes an error, the piece becomes “a frivolous pleading” which means that it can be thrown out during the courts process.

Audience

When drafting a piece of writing first a lawyer must look at his audience. In this profession there are many different groups of people one could write too. A lawyer generally writes to the opposing side, the judge, the prosecutor, or to the jury. Depending on who the audience is the lawyer must take into consideration when  drafting their document. Knowing your audience is an important trait to use in all forms of writing because it will help you get your point across in the most efficient way.

Writing can be challenging in the world of law and especially when creating academic pieces. Academic pieces in law is creating or changing the laws that exist today. So whenever there is a question in whether the law is fair or unconstitutional it is a long process and the writing session must be perfect to avoid loopholes in the law.  For example a new recent case common today deals with abortion. This law has been questioned heavily and always will be. However, this case was brought up by a christian group talking about their beliefs and how they are against the practice and use of abortion (Chambers page 2).

Language

The writing style used in academic writing is what defines it from most non-academic documents. Academic pieces use a type of language to shows how knowledgeable they are on a the topic. In law they make sure they use very descriptive words so that the law can be understood to the fullest. When creating academic pieces the author must fact check and create a piece of writing that is error free. Chris explained to me one time in particular when he had change his style of writing so that he could draft a academic paper. He had a big case and spent approximately forty hours reading, writing, and researching so that he could prepare a document that was later presented in front of the supreme court. During our interview he explained how it was the “most challenging piece of writing” that he had ever prepared (Lawyer from Iowa, September 2). The language and terms used by lawyers in their writing is one reason why they are well-known as professional writers.

Non-academic Writing

Non-academic writing in the field of law is just as important as academic writing if not more important. Non-academic writing is most commonly seen in; emails, letters, briefs, petitions, and pleadings. Emails are the most common form of communication according to Chris and along with that he is constantly drafting petitions, pleadings, and briefs (A Lawyer from Iowa September 2).

Audience

Writing non-academically is a very broad term and includes many different forms of writing. This makes knowing your audience that much more important when choosing to writing non-academically. If a lawyer is drafting up an email to send to a client he is allowed to make it more personable and not worry as much about grammatical errors. On the other side of that when one is drafting a petition they must make sure they are concise getting to the point and listing all the know facts. This is is presented in front of a judge so the petition must be in prime format, which makes drafting this much more challenging.

Language

Word usage for any professional is important and you can say the same for lawyers. They have to think about their word choice no matter what form of writing they are preparing. This is the case because lawyers write more non-academically than academically. Almost all documents written by a lawyer are non-academic pieces, even though they still research and analyze. To be a successful lawyer you must master the skill of writing and persuasion. That is why lawyers often choose to go to classes Called CLE’s and learn more about writing. These classes teach tips and help lawyers become more knowledgeable in their field of work (Wayne).

Structure

Every stage in the writing process is important, but it is all unless if you can not structure your paper correctly. This is true in the field of law as well. However, there are many differences between documents that can cause trouble among inexperienced lawyers. When I sat down with Chris he gave me strict details on how he would structure a commonly created document called a brief.

“When drafting a brief I first have to caption it. So who are the planif and the defendant or petitioner and respondent then you have to state the case number and you have to name what you are writing. Followed by Who’s filing the brief, then I have to do an  introduction and describes all parties involved, whether its a person people or a company, then I go into factual background and then I go thro issues and states them then goes through case law, then he drafts a legal argument for each and every legal issue. Then a conclusion.” -Chris  

So, as seen above it is easy to see how structure influences how someone in the field of law writes.

Purpose

The point of non-academic writing is to put your own ideas on a piece of paper for others to see. Lawyers do this on a daily basis, they analyze the law and then draft a document to express how they feel about it and how it can help their case. Lawyers also use writing as a way to communicate with other lawyers, not just their clients. It is very common for lawyers to send emails back in forth rather than call one another on the phone. According to chris he uses email for almost all forms of communication because you are able to send rough drafts of papers for the other side to see (Lawyer from Iowa, September 2)

Conclusion

When comparing academic writing to non-academic writing you see similar patterns, but in the end they are different. Academic pieces are structured differently and therefore contain different information, language, and are written for different audiences. When looking at the job of a lawyer you can’t overlook all the time that they spend at the desk constructing documents. Lawyers are professional writers and they have to be. Most of the time when they are representing people their clients are relying on them to help them either collect, or not lose too much money (Wayne). At the end of the day if you want to be success in this field you must know how to write both academically and non-academically or it is going to be hard for you to make money in the future.

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